Et In Arcadia Ego

Joanie, saw this and thought of you. Who else could I think of? “Yes. We must hurry if we’re going to dance.” – PS, watch the flame.

It wasn’t her father’s tiny, square lettering. This was the hasty scrawl of a passionate man. Marguerite dropped the unfolded page of college ruled paper on the table. Like it’s hot, she thought, suppressing a ridiculous giggle.

When she’d asked her mother if there was anything she could bring, she’d expected a list: the red sweatshirt-bathrobe, her Chanel #5, a Russel Stover sampler, the new Linda Lael Miller. Anything but this.

The endless tests, the needles and fluid lines were taking their toll, and Marguerite sensed her mother drawing inward.

“On the shelf above my writing desk,” Joan had said to her daughter, eyes glittering with pain and some emotion Marguerite couldn’t define, “there is a book, a play. Arcadia, Tom Stoppard. ”

The book lay splayed out on the floor. Marguerite had opened it, intrigued by its plainness. A paper bound Samuel French script, like a dozen she’d used in high school and college, pale blue, like an exam book. She’d flipped to the beginning, skipping the first billings and the dramatis personae, and spent nearly an hour, curled like a quotation mark over the kitchen counter, swept into the play.

When her phone shrilled she’d dropped the book, the note fluttering and skittering across the linoleum like a wounded moth.

“Yes. We must hurry if we’re going to dance.” She’d nearly torn a few pages, feverishly skimming for the quotation, certain it would be in the play. There in the final pages, a young Regency woman in bare feet, waltzing with her tutor by candlelight on the eve of her seventeenth birthday. Watch the flame.

Who else could I think of? Marguerite’s chest tightened. In her thirty-two years, no one had ever spoken such casually devoted words to her.

Joanie. No one was allowed to call her mother Joanie. Not even Dad. And it wasn’t her father’s tiny, square lettering.

 

Write On Edge: Red-Writing-HoodInspired by Angela’s return to longhand, and the more personal, less-distracted feelings she derives from putting pen to paper, your prompt is this:

A stand-alone scene, fiction or memoir, in 500 words or less, involving a handwritten letter.

16 responses to “Et In Arcadia Ego

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  2. Short but well-constructed scene. Thanks. k.

  3. Oh, man, and you’re stopping there???? :)
    I like how you started at the end and wound your way back to it. That’s a good lesson for me; I often know the chronology and trajectory of what I”m trying to accomplish, but struggle with making the beginning pop. This is a solution I haven’t utilized properly.

  4. Yeah, very Pulp Fiction of you the way you pieced this together. This form is very artistic and helps you feel what Marguerite is experiencing much better and more intesnely.

    well done, you

  5. Awesome. Love how this is structured. You can’t help but continue on. Must.Know.Answers!!!

    And then we are left with more questions, just like the MC.

    *shakes fist*

  6. Love the way this unfolds. And I love Tom Stoppard’s works, especially the spin he managed in Shakespeare in Love. I like the secret flame idea. Well played!

  7. What they all said. *shaking fist too*

  8. I cant wait to see what happens next. This was very captivating…

  9. Great pace, so slick it draws you along with it. Great write, Cam.

  10. This is a great story and attention is paid to the important detail. I like that.

    Tim

  11. Don’t stop there! Beautiful execution of the prompt.

  12. I’m with Lance. I love the way you start and end at the same place.

  13. Everyone already said everything! So, I just loved it. Especially the giggle, “like it’s hot…”

  14. Oh my goodness, you have me hooked. I want to read more about this already :) I hope there’s more coming :)

    -Megan

  15. There’s got to be more where this came from. And, I love Tom Stoppard.

  16. You are simply the best at crafting a scene, at bringing a character and setting to life…

    Out of endless options, you pluck just the right details to evoke a picture AND emotion.

    Love it. I’ve missed you. (I’ve been buried, but am digging my way out.)
    So glad to be back here with your words…

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